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Post by Mokuren on Tue Feb 15, 2011 9:10 pm

well, as the title suggest I'd like to apply for the job of proofreader. I must admit I never did anything similar before and have no experience whatsoever but I think that my english might be decent enough for such a job. Of course I'm ever willing to learn and gain more experience.
As far as time is concerned, I'm quite busy at the moment but I usually have time on sundays.

well then, hopefully I can be of some use for you ^^


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Re: proof reader application (test finished)

Post by SuppaiNoRingo on Wed Feb 16, 2011 3:48 am

Welcome, welcome, and thanks for applying Wink.
Our 'Head' proofreader, Vegaobscura should show up and give you a test;
Hope you pass, Our releases should probably subjected to more proofreading...
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Re: proof reader application (test finished)

Post by Hazama on Wed Feb 16, 2011 8:11 am

Unfortunately, our head proof isnt around that much. We can't tell when he'll visit this forum again, so until then we cannot do anything about your application :/
@staff: or if you guys wanna have him in right away then that's also good :>

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Re: proof reader application (test finished)

Post by SuppaiNoRingo on Wed Feb 16, 2011 10:10 am

Perhaps we should, haven't seen Vega around much. Waiting for reply for Hazama / Kati / some other staff member...
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Re: proof reader application (test finished)

Post by VegaObscura on Wed Feb 16, 2011 12:27 pm

Hi guys, I am so sorry i checked in here at 5 and this post seems to have come in at 6.

Mokuren:

I first need to know your online availability and or times you can be online your test will be up shortly.

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Re: proof reader application (test finished)

Post by VegaObscura on Wed Feb 16, 2011 12:44 pm

heres your test remember mass rewrites are allowed if the flow is off but the characters personalities must be kept intact.

Code:
01~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-Timed bomb bracelet "Sleeping Beauty".The same product represented by

the discipline committee
-The gunpowder itself is not that much.It uses the same concept as a normal

grenade, dealing damages mainly not by blast but by fragments from the

explosion
[2]
-In other words
-You can predict the damage as long as you don't let the fragments spread

out
[3]
-For example.Right before the explosion
-You cover the whole bracelet with your own body....
[4]
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
02~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-Uwaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!
-Mukae-chan!?
(white text:Kumagawa screaming...!!What happened!?)
(title:He loves his comrades)
[2]
-What happend!?
-I don't get it...! What happened!?
[3]
-...Something unbelievable
-Kumagawa-kun,especially it's unbelievable for children like you.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
03~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
[2]
-...Kurokami
-Can you see Emukae's movement just now?
[3]
-...Yeah barely.But I can't believe it
-2nd year Unzen used his bomb on me before.But I couldn't do it without

hesitation like her
[4]
-The moment the time became zero,she regained her conciousness
-Or may be it was her natural reflex.But she reached her hands and touched

both Zenkichi and Kumagawa's bracelets.
[5]
-Then she only made the removable parts of the bracelets rotted.
-And take them away
[6]
-Finally,she used her own body to stick them to the ground, prevented the

fragments from leaking out
-Of course she can't prevent damages to her stomache.But that way,noone

has to die
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
04~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-What a fearful person
-I must show my respect for her gut!
[2]
[3]
-But still
-Wasn't Emukae's minus erased by Kumagawa...?
[4]
-"Raffrafflessia" had been always with me since a long time ago
-It was with me both the joyful and sorrowful moments.
-There is no way Kumagawa-san can erase it!
[5]
[6]
-Dont' talk,Emukae-chan...No
-Keep talking to keep you conciousness!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
05~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-...Oh somehow
-It's just like Hitoyoshi-kun said
[2]
-My minus can be used like this as well.I can live this way as well.
-I can...save Hitoyoshi-kun or Kumagawa-san
[3]
-I'm happy
-I could become useful to others.
[4]
-Don't say something weird like that.You interfered my plan,didn't you
[5]
-You know too well that even if I die,I'll come back right away! You didn't

have to save me!
-If you just saved Zenkichi-chan,you wouldn't have to suffer that much
[6]
-...Come on
-Didn't you say that as well,Kumagawa-san?
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
06~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-Something like this is not a Shounen Jump or you will come back to life

even if you die
-You can't think of life like that
[2]
-Thank you very much for everything until now,Kumagawa-san. I don't

know what you were planning, but I won't forget that you treated me nicely
-From now on, I'll do everything I can to live and keep others alive
[3]
[4]
[5]
-...I understand that not being able to commit a double suicide with

Hitoyoshi is a shock for him
-But even so, being messed up like that is not like Mr.Kumagawa at all
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
07~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-He is also someone who cares alot for his comrades.That Kumagawa
[2]
-Care...? What's that?
-That kind of character setting isn't suit him most.
[3]
-No,it suits him.If he is a beast who doesn't think of human as human
-Then I didn't have such a grudge with him until now
[4]
-The reason I got on a fight with him at middle school
-was because I reformed his comrade,secretary Akune.
[5]
-Being bad with ones he likes.Corrupting with his love ones.Choosing

destruction with his favorite ones
-This is Kumagawa Mizogi's naive comrade feeling
[6]
-So being rejected by 1st year Emukae is more shocking for him than we can

see.
-She was reformed along with her minus that even "All-Fiction" couldn't

work.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
08~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-...But still
-Though I knew that,I still surprised with his state like that
[2]
-Even when secretary Akune left him
-He didn't confuse that much
[3]
-We might stepped on his trauma
-and touched his forbidden "darkness" while we didn't realize
[4]
-Please step aside,Hitoyoshi-sensei
-I'll make Mukae-chan's damages become nothing
[5]
-I must refuse,Kumagawa-san
-I'm proud of these injuries.Don't erase them please.
[6]
-That's wrong.They're just injuries.Burns.Lacerations.And what you said

were all just beautiful things
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
09~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-It's fine for beautiful things.
-You don't say you love dirty things,do you?
[2]
-Zenkichi-chan...
[3]
-Of course you won't.I know you too well
-You love clean things even better than Medaka-chan.It became like your

disease.
[4]
[5]
-...Choujabaru-kun.Contact the election management division right now.
-And announce the result and stop this battle now.
[6]
-...Hmph
-If Kumagawa-sama say so
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
10~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-Kumagawa-sama's action of removing the keyholes was not against the

rule.And we understand Emukae-sama's action of removing the bracelets

without using the keys.
-We consider that was just in order to prevent damages to Hitoyoshi-sama

and Kumagawa-sam and it also resulted in fatal injuries to Emukae-sama

herself so there's no question about it.
[2]
-So because of the time up,the treasurer's battle now ended as a draw!
-Therefore,the election between the current student committee and the new

student committee now has the result of one win,one draw, one lose for

both sides!!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
11~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-...Hitoyoshi-sensei.You can break our promise.
-In exchange,promise me that you will call the best doctor and give Mukae-

chan the best treatment.
-Of course
-I'll save my questions for later,too.
[2]
-Thank you very much.And Zenkichi-chan.Please take care of Mukae-chan
[3]
-If Mukae-chan returns to my side
-I'll invite you for a dinner
[4]
-...You don't need to tell
-Well, I accept that.
[5]
-...Messy way of talking as usual
-But normally, Kumagawa-kun will definitely erase Mukae-chan's injuries.
[6]
-His forbidden "darkness"...
-I thought that was impossible
-Mr.Kumagawa might have changed through this election battle...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
12~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
[2]
-Hey,Choujabaru-kun! One win, one draw, one lose
-What will happen if the remaining vice-president and president's battles also

result in a draw!?
[3]
-Finally,it would become 2 wins, 2 loses, one draw or one win, one lose, 3

draws
-Long-term battle?
[4]
-I'm also about to give explaination about that as well
-From the result, you don't have to worry about the committee election

becoming long-term battle.
[5]
-Because if the election results in a draw
-The coup d'etat side will be the victory
[6]
-It's the student committee's duty to have a total victory.From the point you

have a draw with the new committee, you are already considered

disqualified.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
13~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-What the hell...
-Then this treasurer's battle! It's actually like a lose for us..!!
[2]
-If we can't get 3 wins,1 lose,1 draw or 2 wins,1 lose,2 draws, we can't win
-We can't afford to lose anymore!!
-This is bad,Kurokami!
-We still didn't even decide who will participate in the next ...what,she's not

here!
[3]
[4]
-Hmph.It's not like Kumagawa's "All-Fiction" didn't have any effect at all.
-Now that it's okay to touch like this,it's like you don't have just a high-low

switch,but also an on-off switch as well.
[5]
-...Kurokami
--san
[6]
-This is the first time I talk to you like this
-But it feels like we're already best friends for ten years.When your injuries

healed,come to the student committee room right away.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
14~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-It has been always my dream to make a school full of flowers.
-I want you to lend my your strength.We need you.
[2]
-...I wonder
-When my injuries healed,may be you aren't a president anymore
[3]
-No,I am
-Your courage gave me hope
-As long as there are students like you...Because there are students like

you,I can't stop being a student president!
[4]
[5]
-That's right,Emukae
-Now think about it,your "Raffrafflessia" can be used in many ways as well
[6]
-You see! For example,ferment is also some sort of decomposition,right?
-Then you must be good at making miso,right?
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
15~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-Then I want to eat your miso soup
-every morning!
[2]
[3]
[4]
[5]
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
16~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-A ha ha ha! That's a good idea,Zenkichi!
-Please make sure to do so! Create a happy family!
[2]
-Oh,alright but...family?
[3]
-...What? Why are you accepting,Kurokami?
-You should get angry because Hitoyoshi said some stupid thing,right?
[4]
-...I have been always thinking that Hitoyoshi and Kurokami are going out
-Is it wrong?
[5]
[6]
-They have been together since two
-Their feelings for each others already passed something you call "love"
-It may be why Kumagawa said they "know nothing about love"
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
17~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-I think that's a problem
-But if their opponent is Kumagawa-kun
-then it may be useful
[2]
[3]
-Are you okay,Kumagawa-senpai?
-Yeah,get a hold for yourself! You're our...class minus 13's leader,right!?
[4]
-Hah
-Hah
[5]
-...Gagamaru-chan
-Sorry but can you take command of class minus 13 for a while?
[6]
-That's too much for me!
-And what are you planning to ...?
[7]
-...No,you see.There are things that even "All-Fiction" can't erase.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
18~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-So I'm going to get back the second minus....
-No,the first minus I'd ever had
[2]
-Going...? To where?
-The bad dream I told just now.She has been keeping it
-But she's such mischievous so I think she won't give me back right away.It'll

take a long time
[3]
-I'm also going to recreate my character personality as well...
[4]
-...I understood
-I'll take over the duty as the temporary leader of class minus 13!
[5]
-I can't hear them...
-It seems Kumagawa will retire for a while...Then it's good for us
[6]
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
19~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-Kumagawa's commanding ability is really powerful
-If he's gone then the last two battles will be easier
-It seems that 2nd year Chougasaki will take command...But he can't be

compared with Kumagawa
-Somehow he is calm and normal
[2]
[3]
[4]
-My,the treasurer's battle resulted in a draw.Well,but it was a good

battle,right?
-Huh,which part? Such a shame for them
[5]
-If it's the pick of the discipline committee like me,it would have been

finished with 3 wins in a row for us
-Hm?
[6]
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
20~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-Kurokami Maguro...? Why are you here...
[2]
-Nekomi-chan and Unzen-kun...
[3]
-Good...Please take me to the battle stage now
-I came to the academy right after I regained my conciousness but I don't

know where the stage is
[4]
-I must tell Medaka-chan as fast as possible
-How we have been defeated that day
[5]
-What? You ditched from the hospital just for that?
-What a stupid meddlesome guy
-You don't have to worry about that,Kurokami-kun
[6]
-If it's Shibushi-chan then Naze-chan already defeated her at last week's

secretary's battle
-Too bad you came for nothing
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
21~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-Shibushi-san...?
-What're you talking about...?
[2]
-She was indeed strong and took the main role
-But the real fearful one wasn't her!
[3]
-Chougasaki Gagamaru!
-That most furious minus is the ringleader...He's even more fearful than

Kumagawa-kun!!
[4]
(text on the left:Hidden madness!!)

(Edited it into a code, spoiler tags needa be made blue to see etc, it's kinda annoying; (Ringo did this))

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Re: proof reader application (test finished)

Post by Mokuren on Wed Feb 16, 2011 12:49 pm

Well, my availability is mostly random. I'll be available later this afternoon but only till about 8pm
(I'm GMT +1 btw) I'll be able to be online almost all thursday and perhaps friday morning. Please keep in mind that I'm only availabe at these times this week because I don't have school atm.

In general I'll be online on wednesday, thursday and fridaynights and most of the time on sundaymornings.

EDIT: I posted this message from my cell, so I'll look at the test later if you don't mind. I'm not at home atm and it's not really doable on my cell.

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Post by VegaObscura on Wed Feb 16, 2011 1:52 pm

The mysterious mystery person who made my test visible thank you, also no hurry finish when you get the chance.

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Post by Mokuren on Wed Feb 16, 2011 5:25 pm

Okay, I'm working on it now, it's kinda hard though, without knowing the context. I'll have it finished in a bit.

EDIT:
Well I've finished. Hope I did a decent job.
Code:
01~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-Time bomb bracelet "Sleeping Beauty"
 The same product represented by the discipline committee (enforcers?)
-The gunpowder itself is a minimal amount. It uses the same concept as a normal grenade.
 Dealing damage not by blast but mainly by fragments spread by the explosion.
[2]
-In other words.
-You can control the damage as long as you don't let the fragments spread.
[3]
-For example.
 Right before the explosion.
-One could cover the whole bracelet with their own body....
[4]

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
02~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-Uwaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!
-Mukae-chan!?
(white text:Kumagawa screaming...!!What happened!?)
(title:He loves his comrades)
[2]
-What happened!?
-I don't get it...! What happened!?
[3]
-...Something unbelievable.
-Kumagawa-kun, it's especially unbelievable for children like you.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
03~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
[2]
-...Kurokami
-Did you see Emukae's movement just now?
[3]
-...Yeah barely.But I can't believe it.
-Second year Unzen used this bomb on me before .
 But I couldn't do it without hesitation like she did.
[4]
-The moment time ran out, she regained her conciousness.
-Or may be it was her natural reflex. But she reached out and touched both Zenkichi and Kumagawa's bracelets.
[5]
-Then she only made the removable parts of the bracelets rot.
-And took them off.
[6]
-Finally, she used her own body to pin them to the ground, preventing the fragments from spreading.
-Of course she couldn't prevent the damage inflicted upon her stomach. But this way, no one had to die.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
04~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-What a fearful person.
-I can only express my respect for her guts!
[2]
[3]
-But still.
-Wasn't Emukae's minus erased by Kumagawa...?
[4]
-"Raffrafflessia" had been always with me since a long time ago.
-It was with me both the joyful and sorrowful moments.
-There is no way Kumagawa-san can erase it!
[5]
[6]
-Don't talk, Emukae-chan...No.
-Keep talking to retain you conciousness!

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
05~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-...Oh somehow.
-It's just like Hitoyoshi-kun said.
[2]
-My minus can be used like this as well. I can live this way as well.
-I can...save Hitoyoshi-kun or Kumagawa-san.
[3]
-I'm happy.
-I could be useful to others.
[4]
-Don't say something weird like that. You interfered my plan, didn't you?
[5]
-You know very well that even if I die, I'll come back right away! You didn't have to save me!
-If you had just saved Zenkichi-chan, you wouldn't have to suffer that much.
[6]
-...Come on.
-Didn't you say that as well, Kumagawa-san?

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
06~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-Something like this is not a Shounen Jump where you will come back to life even if you die.
-You can't think of life like that.
[2]
-Thank you very much for everything until now, Kumagawa-san. I don't know what you were planning, but I won't forget you treated me nicely.
-From now on, I'll do everything I can to live and keep others alive.
[3]
[4]
[5]
-...I understand that not being able to commit a double suicide with Hitoyoshi is a shock for him.
-But even so, being messed up like that is not like Mr. Kumagawa at all.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
07~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-That Kumagawa, He is someone who cares a lot for his comrades.
[2]
-Care...? What's that?
-That kind of characterization doesn't suit him at all.
[3]
-No, it suits him. If he was a beast that doesn't think of humans as human.
-Then I wouldn't hold such a grudge against him right now.
[4]
-The reason I got into a fight with him at middle school.
-Was because I reformed his comrade, secretary Akune.
[5]
-Being bad towards the one he likes. Corrupting his loved ones. Choosing destruction for his favorite ones.
-This is Kumagawa Mizogi's naive sense of camaraderie.
[6]
-So being rejected by first year Emukae is more shocking for him than we can see.
-She was so reformed along with her minus that even "All-Fiction" couldn't work.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
08~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-...But still
-Even though I knew that, I'm still surprised to see him in this state.
[2]
-Even when secretary Akune left him.
-He wasn't this confused.
[3]
-We might have stepped on his trauma.
-and touched his forbidden "darkness" without realising it.
[4]
-Please step aside, Hitoyoshi-sensei
-I'll make Mukae-chan's injuries disappear.
[5]
-I must refuse, Kumagawa-san.
-I'm proud of these injuries. Don't erase them please.
[6]
-That's wrong. They're just injuries, burns, Lacerations. And what you said were all just beautiful things.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
09~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-It's fine if they're beautiful things.
-Don't say you love dirty things, do you?
[2]
-Zenkichi-chan...
[3]
-Of course you won't. I know you too well.
-You love clean things, even more than Medaka-chan. It became like a disease.
[4]
[5]
-...Choujabaru-kun. Contact the election management division right now.
-Announce the results and stop this battle right now.
[6]
-...Hmph
-If Kumagawa-sama say so.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
10~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-Kumagawa-sama's action of removing the keyholes was not against the rules. And we understand Emukae-sama's action of removing the bracelets without using the keys.
-We assume that was done in order to prevent damage to Hitoyoshi-sama and Kumagawa-sama, since it resulted in fatal injuries to Emukae-sama herself there's no question about it.
[2]
-Because of time ran out, the treasurer's battle has now ended as a draw!
-Therefore, the election between the current student committee and the new student committee now has resulted in one win, one draw and one loss for both sides!!

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
11~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-...Hitoyoshi-sensei. You can forget our promise.
-In exchange, promise me that you will call the best doctor and give Mukae- chan the best treatment there is.
-Of course
-I'll save my questions for later, too.
[2]
-Thank you very much. And Zenkichi-chan. Please take care of Mukae-chan.
[3]
-If Mukae-chan returns to my side.
-I'll invite you for a dinner.
[4]
-...You don't need to tell me that.
-Well, I accept that.
[5]
-...Messy way of talking as usual.
-But normally, Kumagawa-kun would definitely have erased Mukae-chan's injuries.
[6]
-His forbidden "darkness"...
-I thought something like that was impossible.
-Mr.Kumagawa may have changed through this election battle...

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
12~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
[2]
-Hey, Choujabaru-kun! One win, one draw, one loss
-What will happen if the remaining vice-president and president's battle results in a draw too!?
[3]
-And in the end it would become 2 wins, 2 loses, one draw or one win, one lose, 3 draws.
-Long-term battle?
[4]
-I'm about to give explaination on that as well.
-Based on these results, you don't have to worry about the committee election becoming long-term battle.
[5]
-Because if the election results in a draw.
-The coup d'etat side will be victorious.
[6]
-It's the student committee's duty to have a total victory. If they have a draw with the new committee, they are already considered disqualified.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
13~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
[1]
-What the hell...
-Then this treasurer's battle! It's actually like a loss for us..!!
[2]
-If we can't get 3 wins, 1 loss, 1 draw or 2 wins, 1 loss, 2 draws, we can't win.
-We can't afford to lose anymore!!
-This is bad, Kurokami!
-We didn't even decide yet who will participate in the next ...what, she's not here!
[3]
[4]
-Hmph.It's not like Kumagawa's "All-Fiction" didn't have any effect at all.
-Now that it's okay to touch like this, it's like you don't have just a high-low switch, but an on-off switch as well.
[5]
-...Kurokami
--san.
[6]
-This is the first time I was able to talk to you like this.
-But it feels like we're already best friends for ten years. When your injuries are healed, come to the student committee room right away.

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[1]
-It has been always my dream to make a school full of flowers.
-I want you to lend me your strength. We need you.
[2]
-...I wonder.
-When my injuries are healed, you may not be president anymore
[3]
-No, I will be.
-Your courage has given me hope.
-As long as there are students like you...Because there are students like you, I can't stop being a student president!
[4]
[5]
-That's right, Emukae.
-Now think about it, your "Raffrafflessia" can be used in many ways as well
[6]
-You see! For example, fermenting is also some sort of decomposition, right?
-Then you must be good at making miso, right?

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[1]
-Then I want to eat your miso soup.
-Every morning!
[2]
[3]
[4]
[5]

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[1]
-A ha ha ha! That's a good idea, Zenkichi!
-Please make sure to do so! Create a happy family!
[2]
-Oh, alright but...family?
[3]
-...What? Why are you so compliant, Kurokami?
-You should get angry because Hitoyoshi said something stupid, right?
[4]
-...I've always thought that Hitoyoshi and Kurokami were going out.
-Am I wrong?
[5]
[6]
-They have been together since they were two.
-Their feelings for each others have already passed what you would call "love"
-It may be why Kumagawa said they "know nothing about love"

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[1]
-I think that may be a problem.
-But if their opponent is Kumagawa-kun.
-Then it may be useful.
[2]
[3]
-Are you okay, Kumagawa-senpai?
-Yeah, get a hold for yourself! You're our...class minus 13's leader, right!?
[4]
-Hah
-Hah
[5]
-...Gagamaru-chan.
-Sorry but can you take command of class minus 13 for a while?
[6]
-That's too much for me!
-And what are you planning to ...?
[7]
-...No, you see.There are things that even "All-Fiction" can't erase.

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[1]
-So I'm going to get back the second minus....
-No, the first minus I've ever had.
[2]
-Going...? To where?
-The bad dream I told you about. She has been keeping it.
-But she's mischievous so I don't think she will give it back to me right away. It'll take a long time
[3]
-I'm also going to recreate my character personality as well...
[4]
-...understood
-I'll take over the duty as the temporary leader of class minus 13!
[5]
-I can't hear them...
-But it seems Kumagawa will retire for a while...That is good for us.
[6]

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[1]
-Kumagawa's commanding ability is really powerful.
-If he's gone then the last two battles will be easier.
-It seems that 2nd year Chougasaki will take command...But he can't be compared to Kumagawa.
-Yet somehow he seems calm and normal.
[2]
[3]
[4]
-My my, the treasurer's battle resulted in a draw. But it was a good battle, right?
-Huh, which part? Such a shame for them.
[5]
-If it was up to the enforcers like me, it would have been finished with 3 wins in a row for us.
-Hm?
[6]

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[1]
-Kurokami Maguro...? Why are you here...
[2]
-Nekomi-chan and Unzen-kun...
[3]
-Good...Please take me to the battle stage now.
-I came to the academy right after I regained my conciousness, but I didn't know where the stage was.
[4]
-I must tell Medaka-chan as fast as possible.
-How we have been defeated that day.
[5]
-What? You ditched from the hospital just for that?
-What a stupid meddlesome guy.
-You don't have to worry about that, Kurokami-kun.
[6]
-If it's about Shibushi-chan, Naze-chan already defeated her at last week's secretary's battle.
-Too bad you came for nothing.

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[1]
-Shibushi-san...?
-What're you talking about...?
[2]
-She was indeed strong and took the main role.
-She's not the one you need to be afraid of!
[3]
-Chougasaki Gagamaru!
-The most furious minus is the ringleader...He's even scarier than Kumagawa-kun!!
[4]
(text on the left:Hidden madness!!)

I wasn't sure if there needed to be a period at each sentence end, but I put them there anyway.

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Re: proof reader application (test finished)

Post by Hazama on Wed Feb 16, 2011 8:40 pm

Thanks for showing up veg XD

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Re: proof reader application (test finished)

Post by VegaObscura on Wed Feb 16, 2011 10:33 pm

I won't post a comprehensive analysis seeing as your mistakes were minimal and were either things i had missed as well (I had yet to check this one over again) or would be easily seen and not repeated after you did a few chapters and found your rhythm. You missed a few tenses using doesn't instead of didn't, saying "a shonen jump" when "this isn't shonen jump" was what was needed. and a few minor details our typesetters would have caught. I give you a 4.5 out of 5 for skill and an 8 of 10 for effort. Ask the typesetters about the periods.

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Re: proof reader application (test finished)

Post by Hazama on Wed Feb 16, 2011 10:48 pm

^ so he passed? =)

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Re: proof reader application (test finished)

Post by The Admin With a Big Name on Wed Feb 16, 2011 11:24 pm

well i would give a 4.5 and a 8 a passing score but lets hear it from the vega the master proofer himself
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Re: proof reader application (test finished)

Post by VegaObscura on Thu Feb 17, 2011 12:24 am

sorry thought the extra post went through apparently the cake is a lie piccie made it break. Yes he passes with much potential to grow.

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Re: proof reader application (test finished)

Post by Hazama on Thu Feb 17, 2011 2:21 am

congratulations~ changed you to proofer ^^
can you see the staff section now?

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Re: proof reader application (test finished)

Post by Mokuren on Thu Feb 17, 2011 3:53 am

Thanks guys, yes I can see the staff section Smile

oh and also.. I'm a girl Razz thank you ^^

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Re: proof reader application (test finished)

Post by Hazama on Thu Feb 17, 2011 4:23 am

figured XD

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Re: proof reader application (test finished)

Post by zc1995 on Thu Feb 17, 2011 6:25 am

Congrats,welcome to the team xD

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